Animal Rights, Letter to the Editor (Paper 3, Question 1)

May/June 2014 Paper 31

Dear Editor,

The recent broadcast about people’s attitudes towards animals raised important issues - issues of being apathetic and greedy robots, that wrongly believe we, as humans, own everything on this earth. I have long been the so-called “sentimentalist” referred to in the program, and beg to differ with the negative view expressed. The extinction of animals can have drastic implications for all of us, causing climate change, disturbances in the food web, thereby causing a multiplier effect, until there are only a handful of species left.

Taking an animal away from its home in the wild, and plopping it a noisy zoo, where children scream and shout, making strange faces, jabbing and pointing their fingers at them, is unjust. Imagine being chosen for a freak show, in a small cage, where everyone laughed at you for being who you are - how would you feel? It’s one thing to say extinction is caused by something we have no control over, but another to push aside the harmful effects that we as humans create, by pollution, capturing species, and as hunters. Seeing an animal in the flesh, gracefully moving in its habitat, is a feeling of awe. Watching it on your TV, simply doesn’t do the trick, and a rather saddening feeling would be aroused if you realized that they no longer exist.

Furthermore, animals were the first to come on this planet, humans came after. As animals do not have the capability to differ from well-meaning humans and ferocious poachers, any human involvement can trigger them to act aggressively. After all, we, when hiking, are invading in their territory, and since we have the knowledge, we are the ones that must be more conscious. There are plenty of forests where one can stroll, where animals are no longer present, and we must leave these remaining habitats to them.

Do we not sacrifice alligators for a pretty shoe? Do we not destroy habitats for a little extra oil, killing hundreds of animals? There must always be a little give and take - for the millions of  creatures we have killed, there must be some sort of penalty faced, and I believe novelists like D.H. Lawrence are simply trying to convey this message - fantasies shouldn’t be taken too literally. Moreover, animals must attack on our food stores, as we have depleted their source of food. There are ways for them to stop attacking as well, like flashing lights, created by an African boy to stop lions from eating. And these instances rarely occur. They’re blown out of proportion for the action of an animal that’s simply trying to survive.

As for traditional practices that involve animal parts, the number of people supporting animals is growing, and many will reject these products, for ethical reasons, and also antiquated. Slowly, we can wean off of these practices, not affecting employment and people’s livelihoods in a negative manner, and allowing them to adjust to something else. Animal rights, like rights for you and me, are important as well - every organism counts.

Sincerely,

[Your name]

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Moving on to Paper 3, Question 1

Now that descriptive writing is over and done with, I'm moving on to question 1 of Paper 3. Here, a passage is given and it involves writing a letter to a person that explains certain aspects of the passage whilst revolving around the main point, such as advantages, disadvantages, a final choice, and goes into further detail to develop these points.

My answer to a recent paper, from the following sources:

http://www.cie.org.uk/images/148848-0500-specimen-paper-3-2015.pdf

http://www.cie.org.uk/images/147702-specimen-paper-3-insert-2015.pdf

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Imagine that your aunt and uncle are considering educating your cousin at home and have asked for your views. Your cousin is an only child and, in your opinion, rather spoilt. Y/15/SIN3

Write a letter to your aunt and uncle in which you should explain:

• the advantages of being home schooled

• the reasons why home-schooling may not be advisable

• why you would or would not recommend home-schooling for your cousin.

Base your letter on the fact file and the magazine article, but be careful to use your own words. Address each of the three bullets. Begin your letter: ‘Dear Aunt and Uncle…’.

Write about 250 to 350 words. Up to 10 marks are available for the content of your answer, and up to 15 marks for the quality of your writing.

Dear Aunt and Uncle,

I’m pleased that you are looking for the best schooling option for Robert - education, of course, not only builds up a child academically, but also builds their personality. Home-schooling is not something to looked down on - it’s simply another way for a child to approach studies individually. If Robert chose this path, he would not be constricted by the mundane load of schoolwork, exams, and deadlines, rather, he could focus on aspects that he has a predilection toward, and take initiative to pursue them. Don’t worry, you wouldn’t be alone in this endeavor - there are organizations that bring together other home-schooled students for trips to museums, and group projects. These establishments could in turn respond to any questions Robert has, piquing his dying interest in education, and persuading him to go to university.

Nonetheless, you are sure to have some justified worries. The paucity of social gatherings, like at school, can curtail the development of Robert’s genial personality, especially since he is not one to be motivated and pursue this. Moreover, Robert, truth be told, is quite the hedonist and will forgo self-discipline for months in front of the television, losing out on physical activity and becoming as lethargic as a sloth. It’s difficult to obtain qualifications that would be appreciated by universities, many of whom say they do not discriminate based on homeschooling, but in spite of this, do. You, too, will have to cooperate, aiding Robert when necessary, so patience and tenacity are needed from your side.

You will need to ask yourself: why are you making this change? Is Robert performing poorly in his studies now? Has his school been closed down? The freedom that Robert welcomes at home may not be in his best interest, and rather than being diligent, he may take advantage of the situation. Although you may think there is no extra cost, depending on Robert’s strength in studies, you will have to consider hiring tutors for a multitude of subjects. He will likely need the constant reminder of tests and schoolwork to be focused. You could try home-schooling during the summer, letting him pursue his own interests and see how he responds to being a maverick (likely to be negatively). If you see downfall, go back to school.

Sincerely,

[Your name]

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